Let's play Hired Gun, a very happy game!

I dunno about Scotland but that's honestly not an inaccurate depiction of the way the Metropolitan Police (London police) act so congrats to the author for that?

Also this end seems to have ratcheted up the maximum number of fatalities so I proclaim it the Best End.

Oh, Jesus. I'm so happy we are finally done with this.

I like mountains.

I can't say anything else because I dislike being offensive.

Oh, and I hope Yon's sprites get adopted into a better game. Better said, all of the sprites. Even Oreo walls deserve a better home...

This game has made me feel better about my writing skills, because no matter what I write, it will probably be better than... whatever happened there.
That said, I really enjoyed this, and the random knife fights were hilarious. Horrible > Mediocre, right?

No, this is a case of It's So Bad It's Hilarious, but in the end it's still so very bad.

Also they both died. I couldn't be happier.

Man, even a higher body count couldn't salvage that soul-sucking pile.

Right, then. Time for some vodka brain bleach.

Also, now that I've seen the story, putting knives on the load/save page is pretty funny.

How about
replace "this morning" with "when I read your blog." The fact that he is ignorant enough to say this offends me deeply.

That's why he looks kind of familiar!

Screw Victor Lance, Black Thunder's real name is MEATLOAF!

Mmm.. I actually had a slightly different interpretation of who Black Thunder was than JohnStargazer ... Mainly due to this line:

He's clearly Tommy Wiseau.



No actually, that's a bit unfair... Tommy's a much better actor than anyone in this visual novel. He actually adds emotion to his scenes... not necessarily the right emotions, but at least there are emotions.

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Okay, I think everyone's said almost enough about the story, so I'm going to teach you about Scotland!
I actually burst out laughing when I saw the background for the city. The first time I saw skyscrapers in real life (rather than just high-rise buildings) was when I went down to London in my early teens. Scotland and skyscrapers just don't exist on the same page.

I guess we're assuming that the city is close to the mountains? That gives us Inverness and Aberdeen. This is Inverness and this is Aberdeen. Ridiculously, it's actually more likely that the picture used in game is of Aberdeen, Hong Kong, than anywhere in Scotland.

I won't go into too much depth about the mountains, but let's just say... 1. Those look far too large to be in Scotland, and 2. If this is set shortly after the end of a US school year, why the hell is there snow (let alone enough falling to conceal a body)? Are they at the peak of a north-facing mountain? Is it an ice-age? We may never know.

Just for extra funsies, here's a picture of my favourite part of Scotland.

Scotland is so pretty ^_^

Honestly I was just giggling throughout this whole update. You guys make the worst games really funny with your commentary.

Hired Gun actually isn't the worst game I've played. Notice the huge list of games the author made? And I mentioned early on that I found that this was one of this best? Yeah~

I read the blog(a few posts not the whole thing. my bs tolerance isn't high enough.) and now I want to support renpy and become a strict carnivore.

Is that blog by the author of this game? Cause most of his examples had to do with the guy.

Mmhm, judging by the writing style and overall attitude that blog from earlier's definitely from Wright1000. Even though he was kind of pushy about his views and his overall game quality was kind of pitiful, I really admired how quickly he worked and stuff, coming up with coherent (?) plotlines and finishing them in less than a month~ I mean, I've been working on my games for a year now and I'm not half done~ If I had to list a fatal flaw, it would beeeee dickishness.

Also it's kind of a dick move to trash the engine just because of the community
(says someone who only pops onto LSF every once in a while for coding help)

As long as you don't claim Libya is in the Middle East, your time spent will have been worth it.

DAGGER! YOU ARE TEARING ME APART!

Okay, this is the GOOD end. Because we're free now. And at peace. Because they died. Because someone shot them. Because they bled to their death.

God how does he even managed to write this way the whole game ? X__x

And then think it was good?!

How. How can you think to yourself "yep. this is perfect. best it's gonna be. cannot get any better than this." and not just I CANNOT FATHOM HOW/WHY/

WHY IS THERE NO SPELLCHECK
NO SIMPLE GOOGLING
NO GRAMMAR CHECK
wwhyyyyyyyyyyyy

His first language isn't English? And then he said he works in formal writing or something so it's normal for him. I think.

Well, okay, that mostly forgives him for two out of three.

Mostly.

Mostly it's a case of NO HUMAN.

Engrish would've been preferable to that soulless horrorshow.

The formal writing thing makes this... this thing make a little bit more sense to me now. My dad kinda writes like that, because all he writes in English are academic papers or business/computer/programming-related articles and tutorials, and so when he chats to me in English over Skype chat or Facebook chat, it's mildly amusing/disturbing because he keeps typing in this really formal tone and then awkwardly tries to throw in "trendy" bits of speech like "LOL". Anyway. *cough* So who's up for LPing this guy's other games?! :D

Ooh, I recommend Man-At-Arms~ At least, I think that was the one. The sprites are consistent! Still a whole lotta wholes, though. I never did finish it. It's sorta RPG-like-ish kinda sorta in a way maybe...?

Whoa, whoa, whoa, formal writing? I've written science papers/lab reports, etc, and I can describe the methodology of distillation or the set-up of a vapor-liquid-equilibrium experiment in a more interesting, less redundant manner (not like I'll understand what I'm writing coz I can't remember zilch of those topics). Emphasis on redundant.

I'm more bothered by the redundancy at most. But I have seen characters with very formal speech yet a full gradient of emotions.

I don't buy that, you can always ask a native speaker to check your work before publishing it. Besides, english ain't my first language but reading this hurt my brain. It IS badly written, soulless, plain and redundant.

Hmmm, he prides himself on his flawless (?) grammar and spelling and whatnot, though. There really are few typos in here, at least, few noticeable ones. It's proper to a fault, though. Doesn't sound casual at all, all stiff and junk, so yeah, basically soulless. I was utterly shocked at the uses of exclamation marks here, and even a comma splice! But still grammatically correct to a stifling degree, which does of course lead to redundancy. I would say that he's more suited for writing that doesn't require a lot of written dialogue but that would be an insult to Hemingway, I think, considering Robinette's monologues aren't a lot better... Honestly, it just makes me curious as to what sort of social environment he's been exposed to. If he wants to be a writer then he'd have other friends who are interested in writing, right? That's only natural to conclude, right? Or friends, at least? Friends that he speaks with normally with stuttering and run-on sentences and like filler and junk? He'd have experience knowing what people normally sound like, right? You cannot pin unrealistic dialogue on a lack of experience. I suppose his tendency to name every single character could be chalked up to his part-time work, though. Minor characters are mentioned and then dropped completely, like you're just citing someone's name in a newspaper article. I'd say that's more of a quirk than a flaw-- There's at least one RPG that gave names to absolutely every little NPC on the map, after all-- but the issue is that the plot threads with those characters are also completely dropped. There was absolutely no reason for Robinette's brother to not actually be dead and then turn out to be dead, for one, and I found myself quite disappointed that Amy actually was a regular person and not a secret agent woman with a genetic disorder that allows her to masquerade as a high school student for years on end. The incident with Edwin Antonio was also quite weird and not mentioned but interactions with him actually did affect variables, so.
... Holy wall of text, Batman! Just my two cents on the writing~ I don't criticize games I totally hate or anything, though~

I didn't expect anyone to forgive him just because he's foreign and always writes formally, I just meant to shed a little light on what I found out while stalking him a bit on Lemma. I mean, my mom's foreign and even she can write better than this in English. A lot more grammar errors, yes, but still, much better flow. Or at least, that's what I think. The plot of this game was pretty good, though, if there would've been less plot holes. I'll give him that.

I have alports nephritis so people think I am around ten to fifteen. around twenty is closer so they aren't far off, but I think my size will be a problem later in life. I am always going to be called young and that annoys me.
Avocado if you are still making that modified version, please pay attention.